雅思写作7分学员的考场作文解析,快来看看7分作文长什么样?
2021-01-15 18:07:28来源:网络作者: 景景阅读量:
雅思写作7分学员的考场作文解析,快来看看7分作文长什么样? 在雅思写作的复习中,解析学生实际的考场作文对于大家的提升是非常有帮助的。因此,我们找了一位学生完整的回忆了作文,并由老师针对学生文章做了更加细致的点评,同学们可以看下,是非常好的学习材料!
雅思成绩:1月2日北京机考中心,14:00场,
L: 8.5/ R:9/W:7/S:6.5 Overall 8.0,成绩单如下:
这次写作的题目如下,很常规的一道原因分析及解释题:
“More and more people like to buy imported food in some countries. What do you think are the reasons for people to buy foreign food? What can be done to encourage people to buy more local food?”
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回来回忆了一下当时的作文,大差不差,语言表述上应该有些许差异,但是整体结构没有出入:
Nowadays an increasing number of people in some countries tend to buy more imported food rather than local food. This article tries to give possible explanations for this phenomenon before providing feasible suggestions in order to encourage people to buy more local food.
One possible reason for these people to act in this way lies in the human nature. As creatures driven by curiosity, human beings have the natural tendency to be attracted by things they are not familiar with. In this regard, they are curious about the food produced faraway from their hometown in a total alien country. Being too familiar with the local food, they just want to taste the flavor of foreign food. Another possible reason is that facilitated by globalization and the Internet, people have easier access to the imported food. On one hand transnational food transactions are made much more easier owing to globalization, evidenced by the fact that people around the world are able to conduct business with each other in spite of their different locations. On the other hand, the Internet provides people with a handy platform to complete their purchasing process. They just need to log on the internet and press several buttons in order to buy foreign food. From this perspective, the demand has always been there, only that this demand is made more achievable than ever before.
Still much can be done to encourage people to buy more local food. First and foremost, there should be a more clear advertising focus for sellers. Compared with imported food, local food are usually more fresh and safer. They can also be delivered to people’s houses in a faster way. Advertising in this regard should put emphasis on the fresh nature of local food in order to attract the part of customers who regard freshness and safety as top priority before making the buying decision. Secondly, discounts should be given from time to time in order to attract people to buy local food and also to maintain customer loyalty since price is still the key factor influencing people’s purchasing decisions. Apart from that, different markets and shops have their respective role to play and should take creative measures in order to retain customers.
In general, the reasons for people to buy imported food are manifold, among which curiosity about foreign food and the convenience brought by the Internet and globalization may be the most noticeable ones. Measures such as setting a clear advertising focus and giving customers occasional discounts can still be taken to encourage local food buying.
雅思官方给出的建议如下
练习写作不同类型的文章。在写作信息类和议论类文章时,注意要充分展开自己的观点,并最大限度地提供相关论点与细节予以支撑。论述中不要将论点割裂开来,而是要问自己:如何组织论述才能逻辑自然地过渡到下一步?然后,再问自己:我采用的分段方法有助于凸显我的论证思路吗?我是否也采用了分段之外的其它手段来达到此目的?运用丰富的结构,尤其选择最利于提升文章整体效果的结构。努力运用丰富的词汇,始终做到选用最佳词语。对于不会使用的生词或词组,上网查找,看看他人是如何使用的,并注意它们常与哪些词语搭配出现。最后,要对文章进行检查,特别关注一下你不太确信的词语和语法结构。
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