雅思G类大作文高分范文及逐段分析-孩子玩具多的优劣

　　雅思G类大作文高分范文及逐段分析-孩子玩具多的优劣！剑雅官方说明：这是由雅思考官撰写的very good answer，只是多种高分作文的一种形式。更多雅思写作干货请关注环球教育，更多雅思提分课程，可以咨询网站客服老师，直接预约试听哦

　　题目：

　　Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with.

　　What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

　　题型：优劣分析。这种问法实际考试已很少见到，通常是问outweigh.

　　关键词：parents，advantages, disadvantages, the child, a large number of toys

　　简析：问题里的“孩子”用了单数，要引起警惕和注意，在行文中注意要用相应的表达扣题。

　　范文：

　　It is true that many parents purchase a multitude of playthings for their offspring. Whether or not this is a good thing for the child, is a moot point. On the face of it the advantages seem most apparent, but could there be a downside to this phenomenon of devoted parenting as well?

　　Many people would consider children who have many toys to be the fortunate ones. Interesting things to play with stimulate many positives in the young boy or girl, such as optimum brain development, hand-eye coordination and colour recognition, apart from the simple joy of playing. Modern toys are designed to be educational as well as fun, and concerned parents select products which might speed their children's acquisition of numbers or the alphabet.

　　Is it possible that owning multiple toys could be in any way detrimental to a child? This is an unusual question, but there are some hidden pitfalls. For one, wealthy parents might spoil their son or daughter by showering him/her with toys, resulting in a negative effect on the child's character. For another, a growing child's concentration span may suffer if they are constantly surrounded by too many tempting objects, so that they become unable to focus on any one game for a decent length of time before being distracted. On the social side, older children may become targets of envy from classmates, if they are perceived as having far more possessions than their peers. Finally, the majority of toys today are made of plastic which commonly contains the chemical BPA, proven to be dangerous for infants to suck on or ingest.

　　It is clear then that this situation is not as straightforward as it first appears. It would seem that one of the many duties of parents is to make an informed choice about how many toys they buy for their young ones.

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　　结构分析：

　　结构内容和观点

　　开头段改写题目，引出讨论。

　　第一段孩子有很多玩具的好处。

　　第二段孩子有很多玩具的坏处。

　　结尾段总结自己观点。

　　观点积累（TR）：

　　有很多玩具对孩子来说

　　观点     角度

　　好处 寓教于乐 功能

　　坏处

　　影响性格 个性

　　影响孩子注意力 能力

　　影响同学关系 人际

　　玩具的材质可能造成危险 健康

　　同义替换（LR）：

　　题目关键词同义替换/指代

　　some parents：

　　many parents

　　devoted parenting

　　concerned parents

　　wealthy parents

　　children：

　　offspring

　　older children

　　infants

　　young ones

　　child：

　　young boy or girl

　　son or daughter

　　a growing child

　　toys：

　　playthings

　　interesting things to play with

　　modern toys

　　products

　　tempting objects

　　possessions

　　buy：

　　purchase

　　select products

　　shower

　　a large number of：

　　a multitude of

　　many

　　multiple

　　far more...than

　　the majority of

　　advantages：

　　is a good thing for sb

　　stimulate many positives in sb

　　speed children's acquisition of

　　disadvantages：

　　a downside

　　be detrimental to

　　some hidden pitfalls

　　a negative effect on

　　may suffer

　　become unable to

　　be dangerous for sb to do sth

　　万用句型（TR、CC、GRA）：

　　1. It is true that...

　　‘确实是这样’，常用于段首，用于改述题目，呈现事实。

　　2.Whether or not this is a good thing for..., is a moot point.

　　‘这对谁来说好不好，是个争议点’，常用于开头段，用于改写题目，扣题。

　　3. On the face of it the advantages/disadvantages seem most apparent, but could there be a downside/brightside to this phenomenon of ... as well?

　　‘表面看来好处/坏处是最明显的，但是这种现象是否也存在缺点/优势呢’，常用于开头段，扣题，启下。

　　4.Most people would consider ... to be ...

　　‘多数人认为...是怎样的'，可用于主体段第一句，展开论述。

　　5. Is it possible that ... could be in any way detrimental to...?

　　‘某事是否可能对某人有害？’，可用于主体段第一句，展开论述。

　　6.This is an unusual question, but there are some hidden pitfalls.

　　‘这个问题比较罕见，但是确实有一些潜在的问题’，与上一句连接使用，用于展开论述。

　　7. For one,...For another...., On the social side, ... Finallly,...

　　一组顺序词/连接词，用于段落中列举ideas。

　　8. It is clear that this situation is not as straightforward as it first appears.

　　‘很显然情况不像乍一看那么简单’，用于优缺点题型的总结段，总结观点。

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