雅思剑桥真题G类小作文7分范文分析-说明酒店服务

　　雅思剑桥真题G类小作文7分范文分析-说明酒店服务，本期，组长为大家分析一篇剑13G类小作文7分范文。主题是写信给酒店经理，说明对酒店服务的满意之处、不满之处以及改进餐食的建议。

　　题目：

　　You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feed-back, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.

　　Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

　　—say what the participants liked about the hotel

　　—explain why they were unhappy about the food

　　—suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

　　范文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I am writing in connection with a meeting which was organised in your hotel on the 1st November for the employees of the 'Avanta' company. According to the feedback given by the guests they thoughroughly enjoyed hotel facilities, particularly the outstanding design of the building and furnishing, as well as the quality of reception and transfer provided.

　　However, in spite of the overall contentement with hotel amenities the participants of the meeting reported being dissatisfied with the quality of food seved for lunch. All colleagues agreed on the fact that the food was stale, especially bread and some of the salads, and the meat was tough and undercooked. One of the guests complained about having abdominal discomfort after the lunch, though not leading to any serious problems.

　　Taking into consideration the above said, we would appreciate it if you establish a better control over the kitchen and the cooking process. Considering all favourable reports that were heard about the hotel so far we are not going to leave any negative feedback officially. We hope that this was simply an unfortunate accident and the fame of your hotel will not suffer from it.

　　Faithfully yours,

　　本文字数：198 words （不建议写这么多，一般手速来不及）

　　考官评语：本文明确了会议的背景，方便引出下文。写信目的清楚，上下文语气一致、恰当（正式语气），回应并拓展了各项写作任务。语言组织有逻辑，行文流畅。使用了各种连接词，包括according to，however，taking into consideration，considering。词汇使用丰富且灵活，使用了非常用词和搭配，包括facilities，hotel amentities，be dissatisified with, stale, tough and undedercooked，abdominal discomfort，favourable reports，negative feedback。有一些拼写错误。准确使用了各种复杂语法结构。

　　注：为不影响大家阅读和学习，组长已经纠正了原文的拼写错误，将reseption纠正为reception，将abovesaid纠正为above said，将misfortunate纠正为unfortunate。