雅思大作文官方9分范文-惩罚是教孩子分辨对错的必要措施

　　雅思大作文官方9分范文-惩罚是教孩子分辨对错的必要措施！以下大作文真题及官方9分范文来自剑10（A类）Test1. 虽然是A类题目，但“教育”也是G类的常见话题，建议大家结合范文和解析，体会如何组织段落并积累观点和话题词汇。

　　It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort or punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children？

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　　范文：299 words

　　One important stage in a child’s growth is certainly the development of a conscience, which is lined to the ability to tell right from wrong. This skill comes with time and good parenting, and my conviction is that punishment does not have much of a role to play in this. Therefore I have to disagree almost entirely with the given statement.

　　学习点解析：段落结构：改述题目并回应写作任务。话题词汇：child's growth, the development of a conscience，tell right from wrong, parenting. 观点句句式：my conviction is that..., I have to disagree almost entirely with the given statement.（喜欢总结“模板”的G友别错过）常用论点：sth does not have much of a role to play in this. 其他词汇和短语：certainly, be lined to, come with.语法结构：which从句，and连接复杂句。

　　To some extent the question depends on the age of the child. To punish a very young child is both wrong and foolish, as an infant will not understand what is happening or why he or she is being punished. Once the age of reason is reached however, a child can be rewarded for good behavior and discouraged from bad. This kind but firm approach will achieve more than harsh punishments, which might entail many negative consequences unintended by the parent.

　　学习点解析：段落结构：第一句呼应开头段提出的“与时间有关”，统领全段；段内三句拓展中心句提出的depends on，分情况论述“为了教分辨对错而惩罚”与“孩子年龄”的关系。关键词替换: to punish sb, being punished, harsh punishments; a very young child, an infant, the age of reason. 话题词汇：wrong and foolish, kind but firm, reward, discourage. 常用短语：造成后果entail negative consequences.语法结构：as连接复杂句，被动语态，which从句。

　　To help a child learn the difference between right and wrong, teachers and parents should firstly provide good role modeling in their own behavior. After that, if sanctions are needed, the punishment should not be of a physical nature, as that merely sends the message that it is acceptable for larger people to hit smaller ones – an outcome which may well result in the child starting to bully others. Nor should the punishment be in any way cruel.

　　学习点解析：段落结构：第一句呼应开头段提出的“与教养有关”；第二句和第三句用假设的方式解释哪些惩罚不必要。关键词替换: sanctions. 话题词汇：teachers and parents, provide good role modeling, be of a physical nature, bully. if句，被动语态，倒装。

　　Rather, teachers and parents can use a variety of methods to discipline their young charges, such as detention, withdrawal of privileges, and time-out. Making the punishment fit the crime is a useful notion, which would see children being made to pick up rubbish they have dropped, clean up graffiti they have drawn, or apologise to someone they have hurt. In these ways responsibility is developed in the child, which leads to much better future behavior than does the punishment.

　　学习点解析：段落结构：第一句提出本段观点“管孩子可以用（惩罚以外的）各种方法”（继续解释开头段提出的“我不同意题中观点”）；第二句举例展开论述；第三句总结并扣题。关键词替换: sanctions, young charges. 话题词汇：discipline, detetion, withdrawal of priviledges, time-out, make the punishment fit the crime. 语法结构：情态动词，which从句，被动语态。

　　补充：很多G友问，为什么我都看过多少多少篇范文了，写作还是没有进步？想提醒大家的是，只是看的话，效果很有限，最多了解了观点，熟悉了词汇。要按以上这种“庖丁解牛”的方式分析/学习范文，才能加强对TR和CC的理解，加深对话题词汇的印象，提高对语法丰富度的敏感性。在此基础上充分总结，把总结的思路和心得用于每次练写，才能写出观点/内容扣题、逻辑紧密流畅、词汇语法丰富准确的作文来。